Thanks for the tips Nola. I'm enjoying your poetry series :)
Here's my salvage attempt - though I can't guarantee it's an improvement:
The girl next door came and said, ‘Good Morrow! Do you have some sugar I can borrow? I’m baking a cake with a fussy recipe And I’m finding the directions a bit tricky.’
though I did debate ending on 'a bit sticky' :)
LOL thanks for that Jenny. The accents in the first two lines are better and the syllables work out better with 10 in the first two lines and 12 in the last two lines. But the accents still don't work with the recipe and tricky/sticky words. I'm not sure how I'd change it either. Will have to give it a go. Thanks for your input. Always appreciate your comments :)
Thanks for the tips Nola. I'm enjoying your poetry series :)
Here's my salvage attempt - though I can't guarantee it's an improvement:
The girl next door came and said, ‘Good Morrow!
Do you have some sugar I can borrow?
I’m baking a cake with a fussy recipe
And I’m finding the directions a bit tricky.’
though I did debate ending on 'a bit sticky' :)
LOL thanks for that Jenny. The accents in the first two lines are better and the syllables work out better with 10 in the first two lines and 12 in the last two lines. But the accents still don't work with the recipe and tricky/sticky words. I'm not sure how I'd change it either. Will have to give it a go. Thanks for your input. Always appreciate your comments :)