This is such a vital part of good writing. Sometimes the writer is completely stuck in "tell" mode. Other times it may just be a tiny thing, here and there, that could be tweaked a little better. Nola, one VERY tiny thing I would have tweaked, that I noticed straight away, in your story was this sentence:
Libby clinked her glass of ginger ale against his. ‘To Sable Island.’ She took a long sip.
Like I said, it's a really minor thing, and you are definitely showing more than telling, but I would probably try and make it even a little more showy. This is VERY rough, but something like:
Bubbles of ginger ale effervesced to the top of Libby's glass as she clinked it against his. ‘To Sable Island.’ She took a long sip.
That's rough, and like I said, MINOR, but just a thought. :-)
This is such a vital part of good writing. Sometimes the writer is completely stuck in "tell" mode. Other times it may just be a tiny thing, here and there, that could be tweaked a little better. Nola, one VERY tiny thing I would have tweaked, that I noticed straight away, in your story was this sentence:
Libby clinked her glass of ginger ale against his. ‘To Sable Island.’ She took a long sip.
Like I said, it's a really minor thing, and you are definitely showing more than telling, but I would probably try and make it even a little more showy. This is VERY rough, but something like:
Bubbles of ginger ale effervesced to the top of Libby's glass as she clinked it against his. ‘To Sable Island.’ She took a long sip.
That's rough, and like I said, MINOR, but just a thought. :-)